Nothing should hold you back
From immersing yourself
Forgetting yourself
Drowning yourself
Letting yourseld flow
Finding yourself back
Nothing should hold you back
From exhiliration
Nothing does
Except for
That flowing black cloth
That some think
Protects your modesty
The black cloth is my shroud?
ReplyDeleteindeed not. it is a burqa
Deletei can understand how women who customarily veil their faces feel while being by the ocean, faraway from their authoritarian community members.
ReplyDeletei feel so sorry for you, and happy as well for the moment that you can cherish.
i can understand how women, who have to customarily veil their faces, feel while being by the ocean, faraway from their authoritarian community members.
ReplyDeletei feel so sorry for you, and happy as well for the moment that you can cherish.
if you can you should rebel and disown the black cloth custom.
again, it is not about me :)
Deletein that case, 'you' is not for the poet.
Deleteit seems you don't have to sleep. don't say that to me :)
of course it is not for the poet. it is for those i saw.
DeleteI sleep a lot. maybe we live in different time zones.
poets should sleep but never fall asleep.
Deletethey have to be aware all the time. enjoy your sleepless night.
the time zone seems to be same.
i will return home shortly. good night.
i sleep too much though, maybe i m not a pot then :P
Deletehere your pot means marijuana? i support medical marijuana campaign.
ReplyDeletedamn, i make far too many typos for it be funny any more. POET. i support all kinds of things for adults who know wat they r doing
DeleteDamn, I never thought it was a typo. I thought mention of pot was some symbolic or idiomatic expression.
ReplyDelete:P
ReplyDeleteHow long
ReplyDeleteIs your tongue
That floats in air
As if it sprung
From the sea to layer of ozone
(You made me poetic wink wink)
wow, i m proud of you,
Deleteand more proud of myself for inspiring u :P
this time i'll give a wink. please write a poem about it.
;)
somebody is beating her own trumpet.
Delete;)
--
your wink
is
dangerous than
the hole of sink
because
it is
bait
to get
a stranger
that is me
;)
Delete--
(wink poem on demand)
--
your wink
is
dangerous than
the hole of sink
because
it is
bait
to get
a stranger
who you have never met
(this one is better than last version)
your wink
ReplyDeleteis
dangerous than
the hole of sink
because
it is
bait
to get
a stranger
that is me
who you have never met
PS: Now i understand how the temptation to rewrite happens to be. Thanks
your wink
ReplyDeleteis
dangerous than
the hole of sink
because
it is
bait
to get
a stranger
that is me
who you have never met
and
will never get to see.
PS: Now i understand how the temptation to rewrite happens to be. Thanks
after three rewrites, u have lost the right to criticize me for good :)
Deletesure i m beating m own trumpet, no point in pawing the ground in modesty when u know u r good :P
but, to spread the sunshine, you get better every time :)
At least, I was honest.
DeleteYou can see all versions. :)
r u implying that i m dishonest
DeleteThat's what you are asking? Seems you draw conclusions and raise questions in haste.
Deleteyes, that is wat i m asking. and u r right again, i have been accused of drawing conclusion in haste
Deleteyou are accused only or you do that?
ReplyDeleteanswer my question first
DeleteDear poet,
ReplyDeleteI was trying to be funny when I said "At least I was honest".
I did not imply that you were dishonest.
I apologise if I could not enunciate properly.
The stress that I answer your question first has been a Zen moment; I thank you for that.
Best
Anonymous reader
zen moment! wow! give me one too :)
DeleteZen moment is something that one perceives. It is not material that can be given or taken. :)
ReplyDeleteSince you asked me for it, I have to tell you what I meant by Zen moment yesterday.
Seeing your comments in response to mine, I realized that you were annoyed beyond the level that you ought to be. That was certainly because of my comments; I then decided "Nope, not further".
That was Zen moment.